和女鬼一起走过的日子(2/3)

&esp;&esp;作为女主,我想赋予一个比较不同、或者比较可爱的出场方式,而且又要与主角扯上关系。所以就花费了整整三章的笔墨去写、去铺垫。

&esp;&esp;我以为想要写出能打动人心的情节,那必须建立在令人信服、并引以为真实存在的场景中。所以在描述场景物事的时候,就显得有些过于苛刻,导致了大家看书不顺畅、看不懂的情况,确实是我始料未及的,今后会努力的去平衡这一点。

&esp;&esp;不过看书评区吐槽的朋友很多,而且我也反思过这毕竟是网文、不是单纯写给自己看的,所以现在已经尽可能的多分段了。而且为了尽量减轻大家的阅读压力,我刻意用那些被大家批评的“省略号、顿号”来代替逗号句号。

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&esp;&esp;只是看来目前确实给大家造成了阅读压力,所以今后也会斟酌着修改一些。

&esp;&esp;那么按照这个来讲,女主和主角几乎不可能在茫茫人海中相遇,因为以主角的性格,不可能主动出去“偶遇”,那作为有生活圈的女主,凭什么一定要遇到主角?

&esp;&esp;这点我不作否认,一些朋友说的也很在理。而且按照大纲,小说本应该结束第二个了,可惜现在连第一个都没结束,而且令人沮丧的是这个大家并不买账,都认为我写的太乱、情节太碎、不知所云。

&esp;&esp

&esp;&esp;举个实例,就像是刚开篇陈留县那次文会,我把许多个场景都融合在一大段中写,选取的角度是鸟瞰式的,整个文会里的人物、情节、景色,都是这个场景中的棋子,因此都应该归于一段、一个整体,或者说……这整个的一段,就是为了表述那种小桥流水人家的感觉,只不过把它置换成了具体动态的人物景图。

&esp;&esp;但我又不想通过高频率的分段来达到这种阅读节奏感,因为我觉得会很浮躁,所以就想出了用省略号的长短、顿号来调整阅读节奏的方法。

&esp;&esp;其实我想我的本意应该不是坏的。我一直要追求剧情的合理性和现实性(极个别除外),所以前期的铺垫就做的比较细,说亢长也不为过。但由于自身笔力不够,所以反而砸了自己的脚。

&esp;&esp;只不过好像又是我一厢情愿了,大家无法接受这样的“滥用”,在此还是蛮抱歉的,以后会慢慢改过来。

&esp;&esp;所以如果让我硬是去分段,确实有些为难,我觉得这会破坏这种整体性,就像是一个人缺了只腿一样。当然、也可能只是我这个作者这么一厢情愿的认为,而且目前看来好像也确实是如此。

&esp;&esp;在我的构文中,每一大段,就是一个完整或者完美的场景。以我自己来看,就像是电影里的长镜头,一个个场景慢慢推进过去,没有闪回、没有中断,很自然的那种。

&esp;&esp;这是当初横在我面前的难题,或者说不可解的命题。

&esp;&esp;倒不是不懂这些用法,只是试图通过这些来引导大家的阅读节奏,或者是缓冲文字过渡。因为以我自己的阅读体验来说,我写的文要以一种稍缓的阅读度浏览,快了、似乎就会变味儿。

&esp;&esp;比如追溯到前次李清照的登场。

&esp;&esp;所以每次我都只是把这个场景里的几个亮点、重点,单独列一段或者一句出来说,然后又归于整体。反正那时候的原则就是尽量保持整体的一致性。

&esp;&esp;还有对于那些什么对话不分行,人物称谓混乱之类的。我只想说这样写不是为了图省事,都有着自己的考校,都是对当时语境情景再三思量后的选择。

的感觉来的分段,到了该分段的时候就分段,倒不是故意要凑成这么一大块来恶心大家。

&esp;&esp;还有对于吐槽我描述物事太过烦杂累赘的问题,我只能说,股子里那泛酸的文青劲儿还是放不下来。

&esp;&esp;我认为在主角没有出现的时候,每个人都应该有自己生活的圈子,都有自己的那一套的生活作息。

&esp;&esp;以我来看,标点符号明出来,是为了辅助阅读,而不是一套硬性规则,只要能让阅读变得更为轻松顺畅,那也不必这么死磕的计较标点符号的正确用法。

&esp;&esp;至于在情节上,心里不是不清楚,但还是导致了现在行文拖沓、情节展过于缓慢的毛病。

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